About 90 percent of Hawaii's energy comes from imported oil. Hawaii is the only place that depends so much on the United States for imported oil. Hawaii can't rely on other states for oil that the U.S states can. Hawaii's future is depended so much on imported oil. Although Hawaii may be so reliable on the U.S it is blessed with lots of sunshine, strong winds, fast growing crops, flowing streams, geothermal heat, waves, and both warm and cold waters. We can use all these RENEWABLE RESOURCES to help produce energy and decrease the number of imported oil that comes from the Mainland.
Hawaii is so determined to find new ways to take advantage of all their renewable resources. If we use each renewable resource it helps decrease the chances of Global Warming by reducing air pollution. Every barrel of oil or ton of coal replaced with these renewable resources can reduce the amount of carbon dioxide that is exposed to the atmosphere. The state is taking a giant and smart step in actively supporting the development of a mix of renewable resources including Hydro power.
Hydropower uses the energy in flowing water to make electricity or to handle machinery. The force of falling water or flowing streams spins a turbine. A water turbine is much like a windmill except to use the turbine its poawered by water instead of wind. The turbine turns a generator that changes mechanical energy into electricty.
Hydropower plants have played a role in Hawaii for many decades, going from operating sugar mills to producing electricity for many utilities in Hawaii. It has been used to produce electricity for more than 100 years. The Wailuku River Hydroelectric Power Company plant is the largest in the state of Hawaii and began in May 1993. Taking about five miles of land, $30 million to plan and build, this power plant took 5 years to construct. It generates about 34 million kWh of electrical energy annually. Thats enough to supply 5,000 homes and replace 55,000 barrels of imported oil.
You have a great amount of information for your topic. In addition, in your essay, you should add the questions and information from the interviews and explain cause cand effects about your subtopic. To end it, make sure that you create a conclusions at the end to wrap of everything you said.
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ReplyDeleteI like your essay because your facts are accurate and recent. They make a lot of sense and make me wonder. I agree with Traci, try adding the answers from HECO to make your essay more interesting. Not bad. (:
Hi Brittany,
ReplyDeleteI don't see much of a revision since the essay draft that you did for your impromptu. My comments are still pretty much the same: "Info provided on hydroelectric power but need to do more to connect it with your thesis idea of it being 'green.' Show the cause and effect relationship. Should be problem solution. Essay seemed more like a report than a thesis essay."
And both Traci and Janelle make that recommendation, as well as the recommendation to add in the information from your interview.
Traci and Janelle, although your comments were accurate they were not developed enough to have attained the standards for good critiquing. I have said this on earlier critiques, so please try to improve the depth of your responses on the blogs.
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And I forgot to add in this comment about your critiquing. Like Traci and Janelle, you've got to put a lot more effort into your critiques. I've mentioned this before and I have passed out samples that I consider to be model critiques. Yours need to start looking more like those.
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