Verbs: bending, picture taking, receding water
Sensory details:
Hear: rush of water on the sand, the click of the camera as it takes a picture
Smell: the scent of salty beach water
Feel:the gentle touch of the camera's structure as it is being constantly adjusted
Sight: the beautiful scene of the beach, the camera's own view, setting sun, the necessary equipment in the photographers backpack, slow and gentle waves, the dry and wet sand
Hi Brittany,
ReplyDeletehehe...you have a picture of Sharmaine, the camera :)
Some good details but need to work toward more specifics and away from abstracts ("beautiful scene" "necessary equipment")
Assessment score: 3/2
mrs s